https://wetranscripts.dreamwidth.org/ Writing Excuses Transcripts - Dreamwidth Studios Sat, 26 Feb 2011 13:40:00 GMT LiveJournal / Dreamwidth Studios wetranscripts community https://wetranscripts.dreamwidth.org/34921.html Sat, 26 Feb 2011 13:40:00 GMT https://wetranscripts.dreamwidth.org/34921.html Posted by: <span lj:user='mbarker.livejournal.com' style='white-space: nowrap;' class='ljuser'><a href='https://www.dreamwidth.org/profile?userid=92151&amp;t=I'><img src='https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/openid.png' alt='[identity profile] ' width='16' height='16' style='vertical-align: text-bottom; border: 0; padding-right: 1px;' /></a><a href='http://mbarker.livejournal.com/' rel='nofollow'><b>mbarker.livejournal.com</b></a></span><br /><br />Writing Excuses Season Four Episode 29: Line Editing<br /><br />From <a href="http://www.writingexcuses.com/2010/07/25/writing-excuses-4-29-line-editing/">http://www.writingexcuses.com/2010/07/25/writing-excuses-4-29-line-editing/</a><br /><br />Key Points: Line editing -- tightening up individual sentences -- is normally done after story editing. Avoid excess adverbs (ly words). Adjectives are like pepper -- a little adds flavor, too much ruins the dish. Be wary of anthropomorphizing. Watch mixed and conflicting metaphors (or similes). Beware "seemed to" -- does it or doesn't it? Character act -- active voice lets them act! Go ahead and give us a name.<br /><span class="cut-wrapper"><span style="display: none;" id="span-cuttag___1" class="cuttag"></span><b class="cut-open">(&nbsp;</b><b class="cut-text"><a href="https://wetranscripts.dreamwidth.org/34921.html#cutid1">Line by line, slowly they turned...</a></b><b class="cut-close">&nbsp;)</b></span><div style="display: none;" id="div-cuttag___1" aria-live="assertive"></div><br />[Dan] Yes. Your writing prompt is you need to write a story about a man stumbling through the desert and is aided in some way by a headless monkey.<br />[Howard] Well, okay.<br />[Brandon] Okay. This is been Writing Excuses. You're out of excuses, and have headless monkeys. Now go write.<br /><br /><img src="https://www.dreamwidth.org/tools/commentcount?user=wetranscripts&ditemid=34921" width="30" height="12" alt="comment count unavailable" style="vertical-align: middle;"/> comments https://wetranscripts.dreamwidth.org/34921.html active voice story edit line editing anthropomorphize metaphors adverbs passive voice adjectivs fingerpuppet public ext_88293 0