Writing Excuses 9.29: Part Two of Two, Critiquing Sixth of the Dusk

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Writing Excuses 9.29: Part Two of Two, Critiquing Sixth of the Dusk

From http://www.writingexcuses.com/2014/07/13/writing-excuses-9-29-part-2-of-2-critiquing-sixth-of-the-dusk/

Key Points: Hollywood formula calls for hero achieves goal, defeats antagonist, and reconciles with relationship character as close together as possible. In this story, they need to happen closer together. Make sure there is enough foreshadowing for reveals. Don't bury your hints. Make sure that exposition is motivated, don't let your hero babble without a reason. And a reaction! Give the reader enough explanations or examples. Make sure the reader knows that the POV character is thinking. Be careful of consistency. Just because something is cool or awesome -- if you don't use it, lose it.
( Where did he go wrong? )

[Brandon] Your writing prompt this week...
[Mary] Is to have a man who plays the musical saw, and find more than one use for the saw in the story.
[Brandon] There you go. This has been Writing Excuses. You're out of excuses, now go write.